2004-2009高考英文滿分作文及名師評析
作者：不詳 （字數：16000字作文）
2009高考英文滿分作文
【全國卷I海南、寧夏】
【試題回放】假定你是李華，正在英國接受英文培訓，住在一戶英國人家裡。今天你的房東Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你準備外出，請給Mrs. Wilson 寫一留言條，內容包括：
1.外出購物
2.替房東還書
3.Tracy 來電話留言：1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)見面取消
2)此事已告知Susan
3) 儘快回電
注意：1. 詞數100左右;
2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
Mrs. Wilson,
I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.
Yours,
Li Hua
[名師點評]
本文屬於提綱式要點作文，是學生比較熟悉的題材，體現了英文學習應該注意實用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時態運用恰當、準確，各個要點間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類書面表達不是簡單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個要點合理的組成比較通順的語句，因此要仔細組織語言，合理安排結構。在語言方面，要特別注意簡潔明了，開頭要開門見山。
【北京卷】
【試題回放】情景作文
假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，為回響綠化祖國的號召，你班四月十二日去郊區植樹，請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，介紹植樹活動的全過程，給某英文雜誌的“綠色行動”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。
注意：詞數不少於60
提示詞：郊區 suburbs
April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
【名師點評】
本文是設計巧妙的提綱要點式作文，與環保結合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點連貫，在語言的表達上選詞新穎，同時運用了分詞短語作狀語等較好的句式表達。
【北京卷】
【試題回放】開放作文
請根據下面提示，寫一篇短文，詞數不少於50
In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.
What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.
【名師點評】
本文是開放性作文，要求考生把握好圖畫內容，發散表達。考生重點要看出這個人是捲髮高鼻的外國人，要體會到西式刀叉對中式食物的矛盾性。行文結構十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準確。
【江蘇卷】
【試題回放】滑鼠是計算機時代最佳的人機互動工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計算機操作。但是，過分依賴滑鼠的習慣也會帶來一些不利影響。請你以滑鼠為切入點，根據下表所提示的信息，用英文寫一篇短文。
滑鼠的必要性對多數人來說，操作計算機，上網衝浪……
滑鼠的便捷性點擊、移動、插入、拷貝、刪除……編輯文本，搜尋信息……
收發郵件，選購商品……
點播音樂，下載電影……
如果過分依賴滑鼠…… (請考生結合自身感受，列舉兩到三點)
注意：
1.對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。
2.詞數150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計人總詞數。
3.作文中不得提及考生所在學校和本人姓名。
The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.
For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.
A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.
【名師點評】本文為提綱式說明文體裁，所選內容與我們生活相關，考生只要把所給要點逐條陳述，適度發揮，不要逐條翻譯即可。文章說理清楚，語言流暢，句式表達多樣，用詞恰當、準確。不失為一篇滿分作文。
2008高考英文滿分作文
【全國卷】
【試題回放】假定你是李華，從小喜愛大熊貓(panda),一直通過有關網站(website)關注三年前在美國聖迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白雲”。現在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信：
1、 自我介紹;2、 祝賀蘇琳生日;3、 感謝工作人員;4、 索取蘇琳三歲生日照。
注意：1、詞數100左右;2、可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。
例文：
Dear Sir/Madam,
Greetings from China!
I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【名師點評】本文寫作的內容要點如下：
1.自我介紹;2.信息來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結尾。
這封信格式正確，行文規範，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開頭及結尾、結束語均表達到位。文章行文活潑，感情真摯，語言表述準確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情，以及希望自己願望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理，結合了簡單句和複合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快樂的 2.express v.表達 3.give birth to v.產生，生育
好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
我祝福它生日快樂並且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。
評析：定語從句的使用。
【北京卷】
【試題回放】假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，為校刊英文園地寫一篇題為“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，敘述上周你們班從準備春遊到春遊結束的完整過程。
注意： 詞數不少於60.
提示詞： 遊樂園 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin
Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.
We were tired but happy.
【名師點評】
本情景作文的內容要點如下：1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。內容要點可用不同方式表達。本文覆蓋了所有內容要點，較好地完成了試題規定的任務。其中，寫作主題突出，詳略得當，套用了較多的語法結構和辭彙，而且有效的使用了語句間的連線成分，使全文機構緊湊。本文敘述清楚，描寫細緻，準確運用了很多富有表現力的詞和句型，例如：“set off early”，“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等，將活動的情形很形象地描述了出來。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1 set off 出發 2. litter n.廢棄物 3.respectively adv.分別地
好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .
1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.
然而，當我們登上山頂，被眼前的一幕驚呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。
評析：細節描寫，生動形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動傳神。
【江蘇卷】
【試題回放】實現有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關係，不僅要善於言表，更要學會傾聽。請你根據下表中所提供的信息，寫一篇題為 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演講稿。
為何傾聽表示尊重，增進理解，建立良好的人際關係
誰來傾聽家長傾聽孩子理解孩子，消除代溝，……
老師傾聽學生了解學生，滿足需求，……
怎樣傾聽(請考生聯繫自己擬定內容，列舉兩至三點。)
注意：
1、 對所給要點，逐一陳述，適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。
2、 詞數150左右。開頭和結尾已經寫好，不計入總詞數。
3、 演講稿中不得提及考生所在學校及本人姓名。
Good afternoon, everyone.
The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.
Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.
Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.
Thank you for your listening!
【名師點評】
這是一篇感情真摯、熱情洋溢的演講稿，文中大量運用排比句型，不但準確流暢地表達出題目中所提供的信息，而且體現出作者熟練運用英文的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同結構的複合句式，將傾聽的對象及其作用闡述得淋漓盡致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句議論應如何傾聽，則更進一步地增強了這篇演說稿的說服力。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1.promote v .促進 2. interpersonal adj.人際的3. generation gap. 代溝
4. open-minded adj. 虛心的
好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
同學之間應該互相傾聽，這樣他們可以互相學習和幫助，也會形成友誼。
評析：複雜句的組合，被動句的使用。
2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.
我想強調的是我們每個人都應該更多的傾聽他人。
評析：複合句的使用。
【湖北卷】
【試題回放】假設你是卜曼宜，你購買了一部某外國公司生產的手機，因有質量問題，要求該公司更換。請根據下列要點，用英文寫一封電子郵件。
要點：1. 問題：手機不響鈴，不能發簡訊;該產品已售完，無法更換;型號新，無配件，無法維修。 2. 要求：公司應儘快予以更換。
注意：1. 詞數為100左右;
2. 參考辭彙：配件—— spare part;
3. 電子郵件的開頭和結尾已為你寫好(不計入你所寫詞數);
4.已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結尾不得抄入答題卡。
Dear Sir，
I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.
Thank you for your consideration.
Sincerely yours,
Bu Manyi
【名師點評】
本文內容要點齊全，語言豐富，結構合理，如頭兩句說明了購買手機後發現故障的情況，中間部分說明了無法維修而必須讓公司更換手機的原委，最後明確提出自己的要求，明白流暢，將題目所提出的要點全部表達清楚，較好的完成了任務。全文以一般過去時為基調，結合主動語態與被動語態，並使用了so, but, therefore 等連線詞，使文章結構完整嚴密。固定短語，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的語言顯得地道而精煉。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.絕望的3. consideration n.體諒
好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.
令我失望的是，他說因為在中國是新款手機，所以沒有配件來修理。
評析：複雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語。
2007高考英文滿分作文
【全國卷II】
【試題回放】
一家賓館新開業，為吸引外國賓客，希望在網際網路上進行宣傳。請你用英文為其 寫一篇文字介紹。主要內容包括：
1.地點：距白山入口處500米;
2.房間及價格：單人間(共20間)，100元/天;雙人間(共15間)，150元/天;熱水淋浴;3.餐飲：餐廳(中、西餐)，咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);4.游泳池：全天免費開放; 5.歡迎預定。
注意：1.詞數100左右，開頭語已為你寫好;2.可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
【名師點評】
本文開門見山，首先點明了主旨。本文最大的特點是套用了很多比較複雜的句式，使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語從句的使用也很正確。總地來說，文章句式精煉，是篇不錯的滿分作文。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞 1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are
very enjoyable.所有這些服務都會給你帶來便利，並且非常的愉快。
評析：bring great convenience，帶來便利。
【安徽卷】
【試題回放】
假如你是李華，美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創辦一份中學生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信，假如你是李華，美國一所友好學校準備與你們學校共同創辦一份中學生英文刊物，該校格林先生來信詢問有關情況。請你給她寫封回信，主要內容如下：
l 表示贊成。
l 提出你喜歡的欄目。
l 簡要說明理由。
注意：
1. 詞數100左右。
2. 新的開頭和結尾已為你寫好。
3. 適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
4. 參考欄目：欄目—column
Dear Mr. Green,
I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.
Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.
Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!
Yours faithfully,
Li Hua
【名師點評】
這是一篇滿分作文。由於這篇作文的出現，導致了安徽省今年的英文作文分數普遍偏低。仔細分析了這篇文章，寫的的確是好，很地道的美式英文，一些詞語的大膽使用，讓人不得不猜測此人或者是家人可能有過國外生活的經歷，否則這么地道標準的英文，可不是一朝一夕所能寫出來的。
比如說：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大膽運用，list, can't wait to 簡直是perfect! 況且文章中沒有一個錯誤，不管是書寫還是語法。英文能夠學到這種程度，不可謂不讓人佩服。
【江蘇卷】
【試題回放】2007年4月29日上午10點到11點，全國億萬學生陽光體育活動在各地大中國小校同時進行，江蘇省1，100萬學生積極參與了這項活動。
教育部倡導學生：
u 每天鍛鍊一小時
u 健康工作五十年
u 幸福生活一輩子
請你根據以上提示，用英文準備一份發言稿，向同學們講述一下陽光體育活動的有關情況，並就高三學生是否需要每天花一小時鍛鍊，談談你的看法及理由。
注意：
1、 發言稿應包括以上所有信息，要有適當發揮。
2、 詞數：120左右。發言稿的開頭和結尾已經寫好，不計入總詞數。
3、 參考辭彙：陽光體育活動——a national student sports program;
教育部——the Ministry of Education
Good afternoon, everyone,
The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
Thank you!
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本文的結構十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準確。本文分為三段，前兩段敘述，後一段發表觀點，典型的作文結構。在句式使用上，作者用法多樣，使用了獨立結構和虛擬語氣，十分出彩。複雜的句式是本文的特點之一。
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好詞1.wage v.發動2.aim v.瞄準3. advocate v.提倡
好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
教育部提倡我們每天做一個小時的運動，能夠健康地活50年。
評析：advocate，其後接虛擬語氣，可以省略情態動詞。
2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.
如果我們不進行運動，我們的學習成績就不會很好。
評析：虛擬語氣。
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據報導，7歲的美國女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)後處於極度的痛苦之中，美國抗癌協會(ACS)決定，每當Amy收到一封慰問信，就給她增加3美分的治療款。
假如你是新華中學的學生李華，請你用英文給Amy寫一封慰問信，主要內容包括：
自我介紹
得知的情況
表示鼓勵
打算為她做什麼
祝她早日康復
注意：
1. 信的格式已為你寫好
2. 信中不得出現你的真實情況。
3. 詞數100左右。
4. 請在答題卡上作答。
Dear Amy,
I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
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本文依照要求，涵蓋了所有要點。文章使用了高中常見的句式，如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比較好。作者對定語從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章，行文自然而通順，值得學習。
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好詞1.realize v.意識到2.promise v.允諾3.donate v.捐贈
好句1. I?m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌，給你帶來了巨大的痛苦。
好處：which引導限制性定語從句。
2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此，堅強地與疾病做鬥爭吧!
好處：擲地有聲，語言準確。