2009年高考英文滿分作文及名師評析

  2009高考英文滿分作文
　　【全國卷I海南、寧夏】
　　【試題回放】假定你是李華，正在英國接受英文培訓，住在一戶英國人家裡。今天你的房東Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你準備外出，請給Mrs. Wilson 寫一留言條，內容包括：
　　1.外出購物
　　2.替房東還書
　　3.Tracy 來電話留言：1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)見面取消
　　2)此事已告知Susan
　　3) 儘快回電
　　注意：1. 詞數100左右;
　　2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
　　Mrs. Wilson,
　　I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua
　　[名師點評]
　　本文屬於提綱式要點作文，是學生比較熟悉的題材，體現了英文學習應該注意實用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時態運用恰當、準確，各個要點間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類書面表達不是簡單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個要點合理的組成比較通順的語句，因此要仔細組織語言，合理安排結構。在語言方面，要特別注意簡潔明了，開頭要開門見山。
　　【北京卷】
　　【試題回放】情景作文
　　假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華，為回響綠化祖國的號召，你班四月十二日去郊區植樹，請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，介紹植樹活動的全過程，給某英文雜誌的“綠色行動”專欄寫一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。
　　注意：詞數不少於60
　　提示詞：郊區 suburbs
　　April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
　　【名師點評】
　　本文是設計巧妙的提綱要點式作文，與環保結合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點連貫，在語言的表達上選詞新穎，同時運用了分詞短語作狀語等較好的句式表達。
　　【北京卷】
　　【試題回放】開放作文
　　請根據下面提示，寫一篇短文，詞數不少於50
　　In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.
　　What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.
　　【名師點評】
　　本文是開放性作文，要求考生把握好圖畫內容，發散表達。考生重點要看出這個人是捲髮高鼻的外國人，要體會到西式刀叉對中式食物的矛盾性。行文結構十分明晰，同時句式使用得熟練而準確。
　　【江蘇卷】
　　【試題回放】滑鼠是計算機時代最佳的人機互動工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計算機操作。但是，過分依賴滑鼠的習慣也會帶來一些不利影響。請你以滑鼠為切入點，根據下表所提示的信息，用英文寫一篇短文。
　　滑鼠的必要性對多數人來說，操作計算機，上網衝浪……
　　滑鼠的便捷性點擊、移動、插入、拷貝、刪除……編輯文本，搜尋信息……
　　收發郵件，選購商品……
　　點播音樂，下載電影……
　　如果過分依賴滑鼠…… (請考生結合自身感受，列舉兩到三點)
　　注意：
　　1.對所給要點逐一陳述，適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。
　　2.詞數150左右。開頭已經寫好，不計人總詞數。
　　3.作文中不得提及考生所在學校和本人姓名。
　　The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.
　　For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.
　　A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.
　　【名師點評】本文為提綱式說明文體裁，所選內容與我們生活相關，考生只要把所給要點逐條陳述，適度發揮，不要逐條翻譯即可。文章說理清楚，語言流暢，句式表達多樣，用詞恰當、準確。不失為一篇滿分作文。