2008年高考英文滿分作文及名師評析
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2008高考英文滿分作文
【全國卷】
【試題回放】假定你是李華,從小喜愛大熊貓(panda),一直通過有關網站(website)關注三年前在美國聖迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白雲”。現在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信:
1、 自我介紹;2、 祝賀蘇琳生日;3、 感謝工作人員;4、 索取蘇琳三歲生日照。
注意:1、詞數100左右;2、可以適當增加細節,以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。
例文:
Dear Sir/Madam,
Greetings from China!
I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【名師點評】本文寫作的內容要點如下:
1.自我介紹;2.信息來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結尾。
這封信格式正確,行文規範,描述有條不紊,稱呼、正文中的開頭及結尾、結束語均表達到位。文章行文活潑,感情真摯,語言表述準確,洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情,以及希望自己願望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理,結合了簡單句和複合句,流暢自然,不露痕跡,的確是一篇佳作。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快樂的 2.express v.表達 3.give birth to v.產生,生育
好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
我祝福它生日快樂並且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情,正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。
評析:定語從句的使用。
【北京卷】
【試題回放】假設你是紅星中學高三一班的學生李華,為校刊英文園地寫一篇題為“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序,敘述上周你們班從準備春遊到春遊結束的完整過程。
注意: 詞數不少於60.
提示詞: 遊樂園 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin
Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.
We were tired but happy.
【名師點評】
本情景作文的內容要點如下:1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。內容要點可用不同方式表達。本文覆蓋了所有內容要點,較好地完成了試題規定的任務。其中,寫作主題突出,詳略得當,套用了較多的語法結構和辭彙,而且有效的使用了語句間的連線成分,使全文機構緊湊。本文敘述清楚,描寫細緻,準確運用了很多富有表現力的詞和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,將活動的情形很形象地描述了出來。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1 set off 出發 2. litter n.廢棄物 3.respectively adv.分別地
好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .
在爬山時,我們享受著溫暖的陽光和美麗的風景。
1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.
然而,當我們登上山頂,被眼前的一幕驚呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。
評析:細節描寫,生動形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動傳神。
【江蘇卷】
【試題回放】實現有效的溝通,建立良好的人際關係,不僅要善於言表,更要學會傾聽。請你根據下表中所提供的信息,寫一篇題為 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演講稿。
為何傾聽表示尊重,增進理解,建立良好的人際關係
誰來傾聽家長傾聽孩子理解孩子,消除代溝,……
老師傾聽學生了解學生,滿足需求,……
同學相互傾聽增進友誼,互幫互學,……
怎樣傾聽(請考生聯繫自己擬定內容,列舉兩至三點。)
注意:
1、 對所給要點,逐一陳述,適當發揮,不要簡單翻譯。
2、 詞數150左右。開頭和結尾已經寫好,不計入總詞數。
3、 演講稿中不得提及考生所在學校及本人姓名。
Good afternoon, everyone.
The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.
Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.
Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.
Thank you for your listening!
【名師點評】
這是一篇感情真摯、熱情洋溢的演講稿,文中大量運用排比句型,不但準確流暢地表達出題目中所提供的信息,而且體現出作者熟練運用英文的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同結構的複合句式,將傾聽的對象及其作用闡述得淋漓盡致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句議論應如何傾聽,則更進一步地增強了這篇演說稿的說服力。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1.promote v .促進 2. interpersonal adj.人際的3. generation gap. 代溝
4. open-minded adj. 虛心的
好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
同學之間應該互相傾聽,這樣他們可以互相學習和幫助,也會形成友誼。
評析:複雜句的組合,被動句的使用。
2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.
我想強調的是我們每個人都應該更多的傾聽他人。
評析:複合句的使用。
【湖北卷】
【試題回放】假設你是卜曼宜,你購買了一部某外國公司生產的手機,因有質量問題,要求該公司更換。請根據下列要點,用英文寫一封電子郵件。
要點:1. 問題:手機不響鈴,不能發簡訊;該產品已售完,無法更換;型號新,無配件,無法維修。 2. 要求:公司應儘快予以更換。
注意:1. 詞數為100左右;
2. 參考辭彙:配件—— spare part;
3. 電子郵件的開頭和結尾已為你寫好(不計入你所寫詞數);
4.已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結尾不得抄入答題卡。
Dear Sir,
I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.
Thank you for your consideration.
Sincerely yours,
Bu Manyi
【名師點評】
本文內容要點齊全,語言豐富,結構合理,如頭兩句說明了購買手機後發現故障的情況,中間部分說明了無法維修而必須讓公司更換手機的原委,最後明確提出自己的要求,明白流暢,將題目所提出的要點全部表達清楚,較好的完成了任務。全文以一般過去時為基調,結合主動語態與被動語態,並使用了so, but, therefore 等連線詞,使文章結構完整嚴密。固定短語,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的語言顯得地道而精煉。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.絕望的3. consideration n.體諒
好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.
令我失望的是,他說因為在中國是新款手機,所以沒有配件來修理。
評析:複雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語。